09-18-2023, 07:03 AM
I like it in general and its certainly better than the old space law, but I do have some points of contention here.
- I had to re-read the section on capital punishment a few times to understand it. The section on not being an NT employee seems especially odd. The implication to me seems that you could arrest a changeling for eating people and if they request to get officially hired by NT instead of getting executed, you should let them. Which seems silly and probably not what you intended.
- I would rewrite the example on disproportionate self-defense. The provided example seems to imply that it is unreasonable to defend oneself with deadly force against a deadly threat. I'd change it to have the attacker using their fists and the defender escalating to deadly force in response, as this seems more generally unreasonable.
- I would add a big caveat on executing without the approval of the captain. Ultimately all staff on the station including security and the HoS are subordinate to the captain, and so I feel like representing it as if the captain were 3rd on the chain of command doesnt really represent the gravity of the situation. Security should only be actively defying orders from the captain if the captain is compromised in some way or their judgement is plainly unreasonable.
- The beginning and especially ending section feel a bit too casual and "memey". Dont use the word "drip" imo, this was in-universe presumably not written by a twitter user in 2022.
- I would add a section on "Comic Mischief" relating to the clown and how to respond to them. Generally outlining that the clown should be allowed to perform mild acts of vandalism and general tomfoolery but not actually endanger the crew or productivity of the station.
- I would add a section on stationwide emergencies relating to Nukies, basically explaining that security's primary role here is to eliminate the threat as swiftly as possible, and that discretionary use of lethal force will likely be necessary. Rules regarding the usage of captured syndicate tools are relaxed here (you arent gonna get bwoinked for picking up a nukie's gun). Most of that is pretty self-explanatory but its worth having in writing anyways.